Salvation.

[RahzVael]

Salvation is a war fought by Saints and Demons.
Again and again this war is fought with heart and mind
Leaving the soul a bloodstained wasteland.
Values forged with blood and tears in times past left forsaken
Always altered to fit our designs, all so we can forget our past
To match our greed, our vanity, our lust we were forgotten, to follow our machinations.
It was shown that even then salvation was not out of reach.
One man shouldered the weight of all sin, with one purpose in mind.
Never would we be forgotten again, for salvation is ours to have.



(It is super important and appreciated if I could get feedback about this before tomorrow. Thanks guys.)

[VerbotenDonkey]

That's actually REALLY good, Rahz. I really enjoyed it. I don't even have any critiques on it. I could really picture the tone in my mind. I'll check back later and reread it to see if I can think of anything.

[JamiDJ]

wow, this is amazing. how could i critique something like that even if i wanted to?

great job Rahz

[xxXENOPIRATExx]

wow, this is amazing. how could i critique something like that even if i wanted to?

great job Rahz

same here

[EagleOne]

Good job Rahz, lots of feeling and emotion behind elegant words.

[Nicholas Sapien]

like!