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LyricsMode
02-04-2013, 04:56 PM
The title is "User Rebellion", I have a site where I share these. If there is any interest I can share these here. This song is dedicated at the youth of today.. I like to put it in italics and green..just a unique thing..

I'm not a revolutionist, rebellious foe,
I just tell the truth, about this hell we know,
drugs and sex, but we forget, we gotta grow,
let it rest, pick a desk, learn you hoes.
its unnerving though, nasty generation, nasty thoughts
Hurlin, "No more double penetration, it hurts me, stop!"
I oughta plop you down into a reformatory, leave you there,
you distraught at the thought of being without a D to share.
"geeze you so unfair" hey, I'm just honest, and on it, like kids and drugs.
"Spare some weed" thats demonic, kids and chronic, drop the bud,
"what" exactly, nasty, talkin bout "ratchet" and "yolo swag"
come at me, if anyone attacks thee you say, "I know you mad"
fag, can barely cross your T's or dot your I's.
Sigh. You lost in trees, fighting for legalization rights,
its alright for these people who use it wisely,
but kids using weed? pills? maybe they do it just to spite me,
please believe, I'm not startin no fights seen? just listen for a sec,
seize control of your life, fore you're left with missin intellect,
By now you've assessed this is the same dialect I preached,
well I guess the human mind takes 4 times to learn, re-teach.
and kids stay off the mean streets, whores and you just don't connect,
free yo-self from the wreck. I'm done. leavin you perplexed.

RetRdidMunkie
02-04-2013, 05:35 PM
I like the part where you said he word "weed" it gave me happy thoughts. Didn't really feel the rest. Especially the parts that had other words.
so next time, I'd prefer if you just said weed continuously. =P


seriously though, it was alright, liked how it wasn't simplistic, but couldn't really get with it.

bazongaman502
02-04-2013, 05:51 PM
WEED!!!!!!!

RetRdidMunkie
02-04-2013, 06:07 PM
WEED!!!!!!!
lol

should we get at him son?
Fc rap battle? Lmao

bazongaman502
02-04-2013, 06:40 PM
lol

should we get at him son?
Fc rap battle? Lmao

i need to be high for that... otherwise i got no rythem lol

MedeDust
02-04-2013, 07:12 PM
Can't read it as a rap, poetry yes. I have to hear you rap it for me to consider it a rap, but I like that you kept a consistent general message.

Deaf
02-04-2013, 07:42 PM
I saw it as poetry as well Lyrics. But I enjoyed it a lot overall. It was very nice. I'd definitely like to see some of your others.

bazongaman502
02-04-2013, 07:46 PM
isnt rap basically poetry with a beat... and usually the use of the "N" word?

Harry
02-04-2013, 07:53 PM
pretty good

ya dig?

MedeDust
02-04-2013, 08:05 PM
isnt rap basically poetry with a beat... and usually the use of the "N" word?

Rap is actually speaking it to a beat.

LyricsMode
02-04-2013, 08:58 PM
I guess I'll post a few more as I write.
Thanks for the Interest