My first song

[xXReiBearXx]

SO for my creative writing I share the lyrics to a son I wrote a long time ago...

Warning it is emo and about a guy so please be gentle with the comments lol I share because I figured I'd get some Ha ha's

Also before anyone says this joke I am going to beat you to the punch...this song is so lame





All of these crazy emotions

This rage I keep deep inside

All of these evil thoughts

Are getting harder to hide



My Heart is bitter cold

Your heart is bitter sweet

I wonder what would happen

If the two should meet?



I really love to hate

You really hate to love

I stay hidden underground

You show off to the world above



You are my guilty pleasure

I am your biggest regret

You're someone I try to remember

I'm someone you try to forget



Now all I do is cry

Now all you do is grin

I feel like I wanna die

You feel like you always win



Never imagined how would end

You are my lover but I am not your friend

Love is so lame

Love is so lame

You picked me up to kick me back down

You stand there with a smile I sit here with a frown

That's why your love is so lame

love is so lame



I don't know what to say

I don't know what to do

I wasted so much time

So much time on you



You said you wanted me

I know I made you mad

I know I made a scene

But you made me sad



I'm in so much pain

Your happy with someone else

I'm going completely insane

Your happy with yourself



Now I'm stuck with you on my mind

And your stuck with the blame

My life is hard to define

Your life has stayed the same



Never imagined how would end

You are my lover but I am not your friend

Love is so lame

Love is so lame

You picked me up to kick me back down

You stand there with a smile I sit here with a frown

That's why your love is so lame

love is so lame



I only wanted to be someone like you

I know I messed up but you did too

Why is this hard for you to see?

This love wasn't meant to be



Tell me now

Was this all worth it?

Tell me now

Was this all worth it?



Tell me now

Was this all worth it?

Tell me now

WAS IT ALL WORTH IT!?



Never imagined how this could end

You are my lover but I am not your friend

Love is so lame

Love is so lame

You picked me up to bring me down

You stand there with a smile I sit here with a frown

That's why your love is so lame

love is so lame

love is so lame

[RENGADE 0F FUNK]

This is pretty lame.

[purple gamer 17]

I started reading... but I got lazy and stopped because it was to long.... soo I posted this.
Then left.

[bazongaman502]

not bad... im actually writting my own as well.. however its a remix version of "Poker Face"... but about Halo o.O

i plan to sing it and make a music video for it as well

[xXReiBearXx]

This is pretty lame.

no no you can't use that joke cause technically I beat you to the punch lol

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I started reading... but I got lazy and stopped because it was to long.... soo I posted this.
Then left.

LOL! Lazy ass it isnt even that long hahaha!

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not bad... im actually writting my own as well.. however its a remix version of "Poker Face"... but about Halo o.O

i plan to sing it and make a music video for it as well

I look forward to seeing that!

[Andimion]

You have to keep in mind that a successful song these days consists of very few things.

#1 Words like ni**a, bitches, guns, drugs, hoes
#2 Very short and lines are repeated consistently
#3 Auto tune... LOTS of auto tuning..



Jokes aside, Ive writen quite a few songs and did vocal for them. In my opinion your song is WAY too long, but to each their own. It also seems to come off as an emo-country song. lol

[Juggernaut9473]

is it sad that i had a guitar part going off in my head while i was reading through this?

[xXReiBearXx]

You have to keep in mind that a successful song these days consists of very few things.

#1 Words like ni**a, bitches, guns, drugs, hoes
#2 Very short and lines are repeated consistently
#3 Auto tune... LOTS of auto tuning..



Jokes aside, Ive writen quite a few songs and did vocal for them. In my opinion your song is WAY too long, but to each their own. It also seems to come off as an emo-country song. lol

It was a very emo song hahah! it is very long too. I was in a dark place when I wrote this. But hey...my first song. I have others I wrote that are not as long lol I'll share them eventually lol

[Deathhawk]

I read it as a metal/hard rock song. Kinda like this

As a songwriter there would be a lot mechanically wrong (If it was to be produced), but I loved the lyrics.