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    Purple Team Story (Chapter 5)

    14 years before Present......


    Puba: Hurry up Trooper, your falling behind!
    Trooper: We've been running for days, what do you expect? I'm only 12!
    Raider: Yea well with our line of work thats no excuse.
    Trooper: Why are we rushing so much anyway?
    Dustyman: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=g4lnJ...3&feature=plcp
    Trooper: And we can trust it when you get a bad feeling because.....
    Puba: Remember how he was able to push you out of that dagger? and that boulder? and made sure you didn't step on that pressure plate? and how..
    Trooper: Okay I get it. But what can we expect to find?
    Dustyman: I honestly don't know. But I sense Reaper is already their.
    Puba: Well hopefully he can fend off whatever is going on.



    Present


    (As all the BLUEs were fighting to the death, they realized this fight was one sided. No matter how many times they struck these things down they just kept rising back up. Salvanous kept using his explosives on these living skeletons hoping that they would break into peices but they still stood. The only order they had left was to cause a distraction so all the civilians can get away from this carnage before they started using the heavy duty bombs, but Salvanous feared that those bombs wouldn't work either)

    Salvanous: How the fuck are we suppose to stop these things?
    BLUE Soldier 1: I don't know sir but I do know we can't keep this up.
    Salvanous: Just hang in their, we are not losing to these freaks of nature! (yelling) Manderrs and Rayven Feather, where the hell are you!

    (As one of the zombies was about to stab Salvanous from behind, It was sent flying to Salvanous's right. As he turned to his left he saw Manderrs, with smoke coming out of her sword)

    Salvanous: Gun sword?
    Manderrs: Yea, do you like it sir?
    Salvanous: Oh yea, now do me a favor and shoot these guys outside the gate if you can. By the way, where the hell is Rayv....

    (The four soldiers of the undead in front of Salvanous were quickly sent flying as blue blur crashed through all of them)

    Rayven Feather: Present.
    Salvanous: Alright Men.... and ladies, lets try to drive these people outside of base. Pick your own undead bastard and give them hell!

    Salvanous: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wStsQ...4&feature=plcp
    Manderrs: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zDlkG...2&feature=plcp
    Blue Soldier 1: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xIt_B...1&feature=plcp
    Rayven Feather: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Yfm0h...5&feature=plcp

    (After hours of fighting they managed to send the creatures through the gate and managed to close it)

    Salvanous: Alright, we at least have some rest time.
    Manderrs: Sir, what are these things? From the few that I saw lost their armor, they look like living skeletons.
    Salvanous: I don't know and honestly I'm to tired right now to care.
    Mystery Voice: But you should care.

    (As the BLUE soldiers searched for that mysterious voice, they found a women sitting on top of a building with a sort of bone hoolahoop around her like one would wear a dufflebag with a strap. In her arms was a blade that was crimson red with gold stripes and a light blue stone in the middle)

    Rayven Feather: Who are you?
    LJ: They call me LJ, and i'm a officer for Reaper.
    Salvanous: Wait, Reaper is a Corporal in REDD. He wasn't promoted, and are you telling me the REDDs did this?
    LJ: Oh no, those REDDs couldn't think of something like this, and the Reaper you know is gone. The old Reaper however is back and its just so much fun now that we can stretch our legs after such a long time of doing nothing.

    (As LJ removed the stone from the center of the sword, she threw it over the fence where one of the undead soldiers grabbed it. Then she dropped the sword as she no longer had use for it)

    LJ: Take that to base while I have some fun with these idiots. So which of you idiots wanna go first?
    Salvanous: I wil.....
    Manderrs: No, I will.
    Salvanous: Manderrs, I'm going to fight this bitch, you wait here and...
    Manderrs: No, I"m fighting her. She is ticking me off. And If you don't let me fight her I'll tell Anarchy your being mean to me.
    Salvanous: Ugh.... fine, go have fun.
    Manderrs: Yay!!!! Alright LJ, lets fight!


    LJ: I can't believe I lost..... to someone who is dressed like that.... (passes out)
    Manderrs: So what should we do with her Sal?
    Salvanous: We could interrogate her and find out what is happening.

    (as the BLUE soldiers slowly walked up to her, a man wearing a orange mask instantly appeared in front of them, grabbed LJ, and they both disappeared)

    Rayven Feather: ......What the fuck just happened?

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    Re: Purple Team Story (Chapter 5)

    and the plot thickens

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    Re: Purple Team Story (Chapter 5)

    if you read last 2 chapters then you know what the hell just happened.

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    Re: Purple Team Story (Chapter 5)

    ive read all of them :P

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    Re: Purple Team Story (Chapter 5)

    What don't you understand and do you like my character designs?

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    Re: Purple Team Story (Chapter 5)

    when i say "and the plot thickens" it means that i like the way the story is headed lol i understand whats going on XD and the characters look awesome, nice work with them

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    Re: Purple Team Story (Chapter 5)

    To be honest, designing Sal, Ray, and Manderrs was weird.

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    Re: Purple Team Story (Chapter 5)

    lol

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    Re: Purple Team Story (Chapter 5)

    This is definitely the best chapter yet. The plot begins to take effect, more fights, and you finally started to make personalities for the characters again. Keep working on character development; you're getting better. I like the costume design too. Manders, donkey, and hellwolf being my faves right now :3 (and not just because of the bitties XD) The grammar and spelling (dialogue too) disrupt the flow of the story. To be honest, the dialogue feels forced and stale (on some characters). In the end, I care more about the story being told so my fucks are minimal when it comes to grammar and spelling. Just work on development and dialogue a bit. Like i said before, the story is getting more interesting and I'm really surprised on how great this whole thing is turning out

    P.S. Your editor is a piece of crap lol
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    Re: Purple Team Story (Chapter 5)

    Quote Originally Posted by Raider614 View Post
    This is definitely the best chapter yet. The plot begins to take effect, more fights, and you finally started to make personalities for the characters again. Keep working on character development; you're getting better. I like the costume design too. Manders, donkey, and hellwolf being my faves right now :3 (and not just because of the bitties XD) The grammar and spelling (dialogue too) disrupt the flow of the story. To be honest, the dialogue feels forced and stale (on some characters). In the end, I care more about the story being told so my fucks are minimal when it comes to grammar and spelling. Just work on development and dialogue a bit. Like i said before, the story is getting more interesting and I'm really surprised on how great this whole thing is turning out

    P.S. Your editor is a piece of crap lol
    Yeah, the grammar isn't great. And the fact that the reaper toys are so sturdy they can't be blown up is pretty cool. That's more than just a skeleton. I agrees with raider on pretty much everything. It's looking good, reaper

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